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Hey Reas... I did intend to comment on this sooner. But time, oddly enough, does fly at times, out of my hands. !_! As to the story, firstly, I like ...

Hey WW - this was a little scattered; amusing dialogue though, off-beat oddity on that despite the conscience idea being rather well used. ^_~ Despite his mastermind and his lack ...

Hullo Fand. ^_^ I enjoyed reading this quite a bit... Only one or two briefly awkward bits - I think you've fallen into too many fragmented sentences. Kalum drew into ...

Lyrically poetic prose - and for the most part, I think you pull it off, brief images, obscurity, feeling and all. There's something almost as beguiling as the character in ...

Gaia, I don't think this site is the place for you. In fact, based on what I've read of your posts, I can't even figure out why you are here. ...

I rather liked it as it was - preference-wise. The flow was - I thought - an almost picaresque balance between poetry and prose. But I do like blurring the ...

No lecture on lack of info - it was a stark excerpt in itself. The action (for lack of more precise language - what was unfolding) drew me in. My ...

...a rather vivid short DD - characterised well and mostly very even on its theme. ^_^ Everyone said so. Everyone thought so, from the occasional grand-kids that showed up to ...

It seems you're going for an almost 19th century style narration, omniscient and vaguely conversational. It's neat, in and of itself. But your sentences in the prologue are running on ...

DD has already gotten to some of the feel, and noted nicely some of the aesthetic difficulties. ...I'll go a bit more in-depth. You've got a good ear for the ...

I enjoyed the book and the film, one way or another. Morbidity seems a bit in opposition to en joy ing something; maybe that's just etymologically. ^_~ Louis was only ...

I don't have time for an in-depth critique -- too long. My immediate reaction and thoughts... It was very vivid; I liked the tone of the characters - their voices ...

I like it even more, now that it's becoming more clear who this fellow is, and perhaps why he is... But, yes - I enjoy the narrative very much; a ...

Hullo Adam... I like your style, and some of the dark fantasy and bluntly eerie description - though I've yet to critique anything of yours. ^_^'' This seemed a bit ...

A startling beginning, into obscurity and back out into - I assume - reality. It seemed a bit worn to me...a theme that remained symbolic and so rather dropped at ...